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Old July 11th, 2009, 08:00 PM
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Okay... someone explain some new words here...

majmoon? Is it moonmoon's sister?

senk?
"Aankhein Senkna" is a colloquial idiom which means ' line maarna' or birdwatching.... now there are some experts like Swami jee and Premi jee who can 'senkoed' their hands with their eyes(who said population is always a problem)...
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Re: saneless musings

Here's one more...


Gham itna saha
zindagi behti gayi

tere jaane ka gham na raha
tere aane ka dar sa raha
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Okay... someone explain some new words here...

majmoon? Is it moonmoon's sister?

senk?

Sir, Majmoon is not Moonmoon's sister.
Majmoon = saransh
Sane Less chupa rustam nikla. Lifafa dekh kar khat ka majmoon (saransh) jaan gaya!
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Old July 13th, 2009, 12:53 AM
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tere jaane ka gham na raha
tere aane ka dar sa raha
beautiful lines....

tere aane ka dar sa raha...

herez to a nagging wife after she comes back from office in eve..

raat na aayi...tum aa gaye...
kabr na khudi...maulvi aa gaye!!!

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Old July 13th, 2009, 03:20 AM
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beautiful lines....

tere aane ka dar sa raha...

herez to a nagging wife after she comes back from office in eve..

raat na aayi...tum aa gaye...
kabr na khudi...maulvi aa gaye!!!
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But u said you are not married
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Old July 13th, 2009, 03:31 AM
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But u said you are not married
i said 'to a nagging wife' not 'my nagging wife'

waise saari hi hoti hain...i know

p.s- yea iem single and I dunno what I am ranting right now...

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Re: saneless musings

Missed this thread ... good ones.

tere jane ka gham na raha
tere aane ka darr sa raha

raat na aayi
tum aa gaye
kabr na khudi
maulvi aa gaye!


this one is bs
tere do nain mein
likhe jo khat hai
woh mere liye hai
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But u said you are not married
padhi na quran
phir bhi maulvi ban gaye
suni na suhago.n ki aah
phir bhi 'joda' ban gaye...
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tere do nain mein
likhe jo khat hai
woh mere liye hai
jab bhi main padtha hu
shayar ban jaaata hu
kajal se kheechkar mera pata
jo phir rahe ho aankho.n mein khat liye hua
tamaam mahulleywaale sawaal kar rahe hai mujhse
ke qasid* ki koi khabar hain aaj?

*Thanks to chitrala for suggesting change

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Old July 13th, 2009, 05:23 AM
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Re: saneless musings

bechain aashiq ko dekhkar ,

galib ne kahaa,

na kar mohobbat ,

na ho ruswa,

aur bhi gam hai zamaane me ,

ees mohobbat ke siwa !!

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Old July 13th, 2009, 05:34 AM
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Here's one more...


Gham itna saha
zindagi behta gaya

tere jaane ka gham na raha
tere aane ka dar sa raha
A correction Sane pai if I may...
Zindagi is feminine( now you know why we say life is screwed)... so it should be "zindagi behti gayi"..... nice one... your style is almost haiku-ish...

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kajal se kheechkar mera pata
jo phir rahe ho aankho.n mein khat liye hua
tamaam mahulleywaale sawaal kar rahe hai mujhse
ke daakiye ki koi khabar hain aaj?
Bahut gahre utar gaye ho beta... nikal aao isse pahle ki doob jaao... pyaar mein aadmi kitna gr jaata hai... good one... check your pm...

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bechain aashiq ko dekhkar ,

galib ne kahaa,

kyun karte ho mohobbat ,

mohobbat karti hai ruswa,

aur bhi gam hai zamaane me ,

ees mohobbat ke siwa !!
Kidhar se udaaya Ash pai..
Last line is from a beautiful nazm of Faiz...
posting here for lovers of urdu poetry..

mujh se pahalii sii mohabbat merii mahabuub na maa.Ng

mai.n ne samajhaa thaa ki tuu hai to daraKhshaa.N hai hayaat
teraa Gam hai to Gam-e-dahar kaa jhaga.Daa kyaa hai
terii suurat se hai aalam me.n bahaaro.n ko sabaat
terii aa.Nkho.n ke sivaa duniyaa me.n rakkhaa kyaa hai (*)
tuu jo mil jaaye to taqadiir niguu.N ho jaaye
yuu.N na thaa mai.n ne faqat chaahaa thaa yuu.N ho jaaye
aur bhii dukh hai.n zamaane me.n mohabbat ke sivaa
raahate.n aur bhii hai.n vasl kii raahat ke sivaa

mujh se pahalii sii mohabbat merii mahabuub na maa.Ng

anaginat sadiyo.n ke taariik bahimaanaa talism
resham-o-atalas-o-kam_Khvaab me.n bunavaaye huye
jaa-ba-jaa bikate huye kuuchaa-o-baazaar me.n jism
Khaak me.n litha.De huye Khuun me.n nahalaaye huye
jism nikale huye amaraaz ke tannuuro.n se
piip bahatii hu_ii galate huye naasuuro.n se
lauT jaatii hai udhar ko bhii nazar kyaa kiije
ab bhii dil_kash hai teraa husn maGar kyaa kiije
aur bhii dukh hai.n zamaane me.n mohabbat ke sivaa
raahate.n aur bhii hai.n vasl kii raahat ke sivaa

mujh se pahalii sii mohabbat merii mahabuub na maa.Ng

[daraKhshaa.N : shining; hayaat = life]
[Gam-e-dahar = sorrows of the world; aalam = world]
[sabaat = permanence; niguu.N = bow/subservient]
[faqat = merely; vasl = union/meeting; taariik = dark]
[bahiimaanaa = dreadful; talism = magic]
[resham = silk; atalas = satin; kam_Khvaab = brocade]
[jaa-ba-jaa = hither-thither; litha.De = covered/soaked in]
[amaraaz = diseases; tannuuro.n = ovens; piip = pus]
[naasuur = ulcer/a wound that won't heal; dil_kash = heart-warming]


Add: *I read somewhere that Mazrooh liked the line "terii aa.Nkho.n ke sivaa duniyaa me.n rakkhaa kyaa hai" so much that he wrote to Faiz if he could use that as a mukhda for one of his songs...Faiz gladly permitted and so Mazrooh went on to write terii aa.Nkho.n ke sivaa duniyaa me.n rakkhaa kyaa hai....

Interestingly many shaayars borrow misra from other poets... like Gulzar borrowed "Dil Dhoondhta hai " from ghalib(there are two versions of that ghazal...one is" jee dhoondhta hai"... no one is sure..what was the original)... and Sudarshan Faakir borrowed "Ik brahaman ne kaha hai"... from ghalib again for his classic....
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Old July 13th, 2009, 05:59 AM
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mujh se pahalii sii mohabbat merii mahabuub na maa.Ng

mai.n ne samajhaa thaa ki tuu hai to daraKhshaa.N hai hayaat
teraa Gam hai to Gam-e-dahar kaa jhaga.Daa kyaa hai
terii suurat se hai aalam me.n bahaaro.n ko sabaat
terii aa.Nkho.n ke sivaa duniyaa me.n rakkhaa kyaa hai (*)
tuu jo mil jaaye to taqadiir niguu.N ho jaaye
yuu.N na thaa mai.n ne faqat chaahaa thaa yuu.N ho jaaye
aur bhii dukh hai.n zamaane me.n mohabbat ke sivaa
raahate.n aur bhii hai.n vasl kii raahat ke sivaa

mujh se pahalii sii mohabbat merii mahabuub na maa.Ng

anaginat sadiyo.n ke taariik bahimaanaa talism
resham-o-atalas-o-kam_Khvaab me.n bunavaaye huye
jaa-ba-jaa bikate huye kuuchaa-o-baazaar me.n jism
Khaak me.n litha.De huye Khuun me.n nahalaaye huye
jism nikale huye amaraaz ke tannuuro.n se
piip bahatii hu_ii galate huye naasuuro.n se
lauT jaatii hai udhar ko bhii nazar kyaa kiije
ab bhii dil_kash hai teraa husn maGar kyaa kiije
aur bhii dukh hai.n zamaane me.n mohabbat ke sivaa
raahate.n aur bhii hai.n vasl kii raahat ke sivaa

mujh se pahalii sii mohabbat merii mahabuub na maa.Ng



Add: *I read somewhere that Mazrooh liked the line "terii aa.Nkho.n ke sivaa duniyaa me.n rakkhaa kyaa hai" so much that he wrote to Faiz if he could use that as a mukhda for one of his songs...Faiz gladly permitted and so Mazrooh went on to write terii aa.Nkho.n ke sivaa duniyaa me.n rakkhaa kyaa hai....

Interestingly many shaayars borrow misra from other poets... like Gulzar borrowed "Dil Dhoondhta hai " from ghalib(there are two versions of that ghazal...one is" jee dhoondhta hai"... no one is sure..what was the original)... and Sudarshan Faakir borrowed "Ik brahaman ne kaha hai"... from ghalib again for his classic....
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good one
kahi se copy to nahi kiya hai na
Abe nazm Faiz ki hai... abhi itna patience nahin hai ki khud se likhoon so urdupoetry.com se copy paste hai... anecdotes idhar udhar kabhi padha suna tha... aaj yaad aa gaya to likh diya....

Add to Dil dhoondhta hai: Gulzar wrote it as Jee Dhoondhta hai.... Madan Mohan changed it to Dil Dhoondhta hai... Gulzar was somewhat scared to fiddle with Ghalib's line... but Madan mohan showed him one of the oldest copies of deewan-e-ghalib mentioning it as dil dhoondhta hai...
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Acha ho gaya tune confess kiya ke tune nahi likha, nahi to tere ko +rep kar diya hota
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Abe nazm Faiz ki hai... abhi itna patience nahin hai ki khud se likhoon so urdupoetry.com se copy paste hai... anecdotes idhar udhar kabhi padha suna tha... aaj yaad aa gaya to likh diya....

Add to Dil dhoondhta hai: Gulzar wrote it as Jee Dhoondhta hai.... Madan Mohan changed it to Dil Dhoondhta hai... Gulzar was somewhat scared to fiddle with Ghalib's line... but Madan mohan showed him one of the oldest copies of deewan-e-ghalib mentioning it as dil dhoondhta hai...
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