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Old April 3rd, 2011, 08:37 AM
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Re: “Naari”- Bhramar-Hindi kavita (Hindi poem).

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user name ji ye aap ki baat bilkul saty hai par iska ek tarika hai samiksha ke ek dhang hai , i m follower of ur above quoute, very nice ,u shud hv also , written clearly bout ur feelings ,aap ke sujhav marg darshan sar aankhon pr , hamare bahut se prashansak v samikshak apni baat roj vyakt karte hain aur hm use cleart karte hain -hope it is suffice n it ll do .
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shukla ji, i hv been to kavi sammelans jidhar jootey, tamatar, ande sab ready rehte hain, chitrala was being nice to you
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Old April 6th, 2011, 01:18 AM
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Re: “Naari”- Bhramar-Hindi kavita (Hindi poem).हे अनाम बेनाम- मुखौटे वाले तुझे सला

हे अनाम बेनाम-
मुखौटे वाले तुझे सलाम
छुप छुप कर बस ‘वार’ है करना
करना बस ‘बदनाम’
‘दिन’ को ‘रात’ कभी कह देते
कभी ‘पुण्य’ को ‘पाप’
हमने तुझको दी है कुर्सी
बैठो या सो जाओ !!
लूटो -मारो- 'कुल'- को खाओ
चाहे आग लगाओ !!
पकडे भी गर तुमको कोई
चार –पांच- को –धर- के प्यारे
चौराहे बंधवाओ

चाहे फिर कानून बनाकर
संसद पास कराओ

अगर कहीं कुछ घेर तुम्हे लें
मुर्गा- तुम -बन जाओ
‘कवि’ सम्मलेन शादी - जन्मे
सोहर गाने आते
कुछ ‘छीने’ -कुछ ‘दान’ दिए तुम
अपना नाम लिखाते !!
सूखा पड़ा बाढ़ आई तो
रावण जैसे ‘उड़नखटोला’
ले ऊपर ही ऊपर उड़ते जाते
धरा नजर ना आते !!

जिस ‘सम्मलेन’ में तू जाये
जाएँ तेरे साथी !!!
जूता और टमाटर अंडे
सारे कम हैं भाई !!

वहां क्या बरसेगा शीतल जल ??
अमृत, गंगा पानी ??

सड़े हुए अंडे भी कम हैं --
बरसेगा -बस -लाल- लाल -
कुछ गटर व् नाले का ही पानी
मेरा आवाहन है प्यारों से
जिनको ‘कविता’ –‘रस’ -
‘सुन्दरता’ भाए !
जो लायक हो- ला- के उसको
अपने ‘मंच’ बिठाएं

आओ लिख दें - करें ‘समीक्षा’
अपनी ‘इच्छा’
‘डंडे’ से तुम ‘डरो- नहीं’ पर
‘सावधान’ हो जाओ –
कुछ अपने -मन की- भी लिख के
‘इनको’ राह दिखाओ.



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shukla ji, i hv been to kavi sammelans jidhar jootey, tamatar, ande sab ready rehte hain, chitrala was being nice to you
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Re: “Naari”सच की तावीज - Bhramar-Hindi kavita (Hindi poem).

सच की तावीज
दादी माँ मै सोना चाहूं
दे-ना चाहे तो लोरी गाये
मुझे सुला दे !!
दुल्हन दे -या -चाँद खिलौना
थाली में परछाईं या फिर
तारों की बारात दिखा दे
दूध दही टानिक मन चाहे
मुस्काए तो दादी अम्मा
चूने का ही घोल पिला दे
रंग -बिरंगे परिधानों से सज-
गाडी चढ़
कान्वेंट स्कूल भिजा दे
मन क्यों बोझिल??
कागज़ दे लकड़ी के टुकड़े -
प्राईमरी पैदल पहुंचा दे
हवा चले भी कुछ टूटे ना
मुस्काए वे घूम रहे हैं
नम क्यों आँखें -पट्टी बाँधे
चलूँगा मै भी बोझ उठाये
चलें वे उड़कर वर्दी सजकर -
मेवे खाएं !!
पेट तुम्हारा मै भी भरकर
सर आँखों में तुझे बिठाकर -
चलूँ उठाये !!
महल उठाये नाम कमाए
‘धन’-‘ लालच’ कुछ शीश झुकाए
रोशन तेरा नाम करूँगा -"कुटिया " में
दुनिया खिंच आये
गर्व भरे तू शीश उठाये !!
‘दादी’ –‘माँ’ -सपने ना मुझको
सच की तू तावीज बंधा दे
हंसती रह तू दादी अम्मा
आँचल सर पर मेरे डाले
मार पीट कर उसे गिराकर
‘पहलवान’ जो ना बन पाऊँ
दे ऐसा ‘आशीष’ मुझे माँ
‘आँखों का तारा’ बन जाऊं

सुरेन्द्र कुमार शुक्ल भ्रमर५
२०.०८.१९९४( लेखन हजारीबाग-झारखण्ड )
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Re: “Naari”सच की तावीज - Bhramar-Hindi kavita (Hindi poem).

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सुरेन्द्र कुमार शुक्ल भ्रमर५
२०.०८.१९९४( लेखन हजारीबाग-झारखण्ड )
Good collection ... my compliments. You are 16? You have a great future ahead of you as a poet or a writer. I admire your writing skills. All the best.


This is not BOLD. This is BOLD.

Written Hindi is easier to read when in BOLD. Thanks.


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Good collection ... my compliments. You are 16? You have a great future ahead of you as a poet or a writer. I admire your writing skills. All the best.

he is not 16 this poem was written at that time..1994.

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he is not 16 this poem was written at that time..1994.

Oh. What do I know about poets. Why no time ... why date only? His last name (surname) is Shukla so who is Bharmar?

Some of Shukla's poems (ones in bold) remind of a famous poem by some relative or wife of Abitab Bachhan. Some are like he got drunk and lost way ... opening is seductive ... ending is like wtf.
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Re: “Naari”सच की तावीज - Bhramar-Hindi kavita (Hindi poem).

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Oh. What do I know about poets.


Why no time ... why date only? His last name (surname) is Shukla so who is Bharmar?

Some of Shukla's poems (ones in bold) remind of a famous poem by some relative or wife of Abitab Bachhan. Some are like he got drunk and lost way ... opening is seductive ... ending is like wtf.

its okay tantu ji maharaaj

time aur chu... sabka CUT-taa hai

isme shy hone ki aur LLKC ban ke dikhane ki jaroorat nahi hai maharaaj ji.
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Thumbs up Re: “Naari”- Bhramar-Hindi kavita (Hindi poem).

हे ‘माँ’ तू है कितनी ‘भोली’-‘दर्द’ हुआ तो चुप के ‘रो’ ली
हे ‘माँ’ !! मुझको क्षमा करे तू
मुझको गुस्सा तुझ पर आता !
कुछ भी यहाँ बनाती जाती
अर्थ -हीन है -रस -विहीन जो
आग भरी है जिनके दिल में
‘होली’ उन्हें जलाना आता
रंग जिन्हें ‘काला’ ही भाता
जो जाने न ‘हीरा’- ‘मोती’
‘कौआ’ -‘कोयला’ बस मन भाता
‘धवल ‘–‘चांदनी’-‘श्वेत’-‘ दिवस’ ना
‘अँधियारा’-‘रजनी’- ही भाता
तोड़ फोड़ कर ‘पुष्पों’ को वे
‘राह’ में फेंके जाते
रोज एक ‘फुलवारी’ नोचे
सभा में ‘नाच’- ‘नचाते’
‘चीर’-‘हरण’ कर घूमे जाता
नहीं ‘कृष्ण’ अब- ‘कंस’ कहे -है
हँस -हँस घूमे
‘छुरा’ घोंप के ‘सीने’ में
वो अपनी ‘माँ’ के
‘बाप’ के अपने
‘बदनाम’ करे है
‘मानवता’ को लूटे
चोर-सिपाही तंत्री मंत्री
‘घर’ –‘आँगन’ से ‘संसद’ तक
जो खड़ा हुआ है ‘रक्षक’-‘भक्षक’
‘माँ’ तूने उसे बनाया
‘पाल’ –‘पोष’ कर 'आँचल' अपने
तूने ‘दूध’ पिलाया
‘गढ़ने’ में क्या ‘भूल’ हुयी माँ
कहाँ –कभी- क्या तुमने सोचा??



वो 'त्रिशूल' क्यों आज 'शूल' है
याद करो कुछ ‘बचपन’ के दिन
‘आग’ लगाया था उसने ‘घर’
बढ़ी नदी में कूदा
गुडिया तोड़ ‘फेंक’ देता वो
कभी जलाता ‘होली’
बिन- मौसम के बरस वो जाता
थाली देता फेंक
उनकी जेब थी खाली होती
नौकर पर लगती थी चोरी
‘लात’ मारता था जब तुझको
‘दर्द’ तुम्हे था होता ??
कहती थी ‘अनजान’ तू उसको
बड़ा ‘भरम’ ये होता
‘कान’ पकड़ ना उसे सिखाया
तूने तो बस ‘चाँद’ दिखाया
‘लोरी’ गा-गा उसे सुलाया
हे ‘माँ’ तू है कितनी भोली !!
‘पुचकारे’ - ‘गोदी’ में भर के
"दर्द' हुआ तो चुप के –‘रो’ ली !!
मै हूँ तेरा ‘लाल’ वही माँ
लौट नहीं अब पाऊँ !!
गुस्सा तुझ पर मुझको आता
अब ना कुछ कर पाऊँ
‘काटे’ से ‘कदली’ फले
कैसे मै समझाऊँ !!

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Re: “Naari”- Bhramar-Hindi kavita (Hindi poem).

shukla jee, aapke signature mein jo panktiya hai vo maine pehle suni hai

kal fir aayenge aur kai khilti kaliyan chunane vaale...
mujhse behtar kahne vaale tumse behtar sunne vaale....


lekin thodi alag suni hai
kal aur aayenge nagamo ki, khilti kaliyan chunane wale
mujhse behtar kahne wale, tumse behtar sunane wale

kal koi mujh ko yaad kare, kyon koi mujh ko yaad kare
masroof jamana mere liye kyon vaqt apna barbad kare....


are the lines from the song changed from the original ones in your signature or is it the other way round?
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Re: “Naari”सच की तावीज - Bhramar-Hindi kavita (Hindi poem).

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Good collection ... my compliments. You are 16? You have a great future ahead of you as a poet or a writer. I admire your writing skills. All the best.


This is not BOLD. This is BOLD.

Written Hindi is easier to read when in BOLD. Thanks.


Tantrik Yogi aur Premi ji thanks -at least some of three thousand viwers are there who like some poems-some literature-naam aur umr me kya rakha hai janab aap ki duvayen hr umr aur jindagi ki hr dahlij pr kaam aayengi , many many thanks for your suggestion of Bold etc ,
one thing i would like to know frm u some times y i am unable to post any creations some error METHOD NOT APPLIED OR 505 ERROR OR 404 ERROR COMES in my way ???
Shukla is last name / Bhramar is title / Bhramar ka Dard aur Darpan is my blog title / more u want to know u may search my name in google
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Re: “Naari”सच की तावीज - Bhramar-Hindi kavita (Hindi poem).

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Tantrik Yogi aur Premi ji thanks -

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at least some of three thousand viwers are there who like some poems-some literature-naam aur umr me kya rakha hai janab aap ki duvayen hr umr aur jindagi ki hr dahlij pr kaam aayengi , many many thanks for your suggestion of Bold etc ,

Sign of a true genius ... not unfazed by criticism.


one thing i would like to know frm u some times y i am unable to post any creations some error METHOD NOT APPLIED OR 505 ERROR OR 404 ERROR COMES in my way ???

Have you brought this to tension of Mods and admin? They are helpful bunch. They will help resolve any issues ... if they can.

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Shukla is last name / Bhramar is title / Bhramar ka Dard aur Darpan is my blog title / more u want to know u may search my name in google
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Will sure do ... time permitting. Thanks for invitation. Is BHRAMAR a hindi word? What does it signify ... what does it mean?


thanks -enjoy n join with Anna Hazare ............

Sure will but who is Ms. Anna Hazare? Is Anna married? Is she a social worker or something? How old is she? Why do you want me to join her? I am a happily married man. May be you didn't mean what I am thinking. English is a funny language and word JOIN has many conotasions.


You are the writer. You are the expert. This is what I would prefer ... to be better able to appreciate and for ease of read ...




सच की तावीज
दादी माँ मै सोना चाहूं
दे-ना चाहे तो लोरी गाये
मुझे सुला दे !!

दुल्हन दे -या -चाँद खिलौना
थाली में परछाईं या फिर
तारों की बारात दिखा दे

दूध दही टानिक मन चाहे
मुस्काए तो दादी अम्मा
चूने का ही घोल पिला दे
रंग -बिरंगे परिधानों से सज-
गाडी चढ़
कान्वेंट स्कूल भिजा दे

मन क्यों बोझिल??
कागज़ दे लकड़ी के टुकड़े -
प्राईमरी पैदल पहुंचा दे
हवा चले भी कुछ टूटे ना
मुस्काए वे घूम रहे हैं

नम क्यों आँखें -पट्टी बाँधे
चलूँगा मै भी बोझ उठाये
चलें वे उड़कर वर्दी सजकर -
मेवे खाएं !!
पेट तुम्हारा मै भी भरकर
सर आँखों में तुझे बिठाकर -
चलूँ उठाये !!

महल उठाये नाम कमाए
‘धन’-‘ लालच’ कुछ शीश झुकाए
रोशन तेरा नाम करूँगा -"कुटिया " में
दुनिया खिंच आये
गर्व भरे तू शीश उठाये !!

‘दादी’ –‘माँ’ -सपने ना मुझको
सच की तू तावीज बंधा दे
हंसती रह तू दादी अम्मा
आँचल सर पर मेरे डाले
मार पीट कर उसे गिराकर
‘पहलवान’ जो ना बन पाऊँ
दे ऐसा ‘आशीष’ मुझे माँ
‘आँखों का तारा’ बन जाऊं

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Thumbs up Re: “Naari”- Bhramar-Hindi kavita (Hindi poem).

Shukla Sahib ... you are a good poet ... you write thought provoking poems. Talented Indians like you ought to receive recognition and encouragement. Problem is ... you either have to be a total corrupt ... morally and culturally corrupt ... or ... India's favorite pastime ... shave your body hair and dance like hijras to receive some ... is an unfortunate truth.

I have a suggestion ... I will not pretend to know workings of search engines and all the stuff ... you will know better. You have blog sites ... consider approaching admin of this site. This site places a link to your blogs and you reciprocate in like manner. This may result in more traffic to your sites ... just a thought for you to think over ...

All the best.
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बुरे फसें 'मजाल', आ कर जन्नत में ... हमने तो सोचा था, कुछ नया होता होगा!
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Re: “Naari”सच की तावीज - Bhramar-Hindi kavita (Hindi poem).

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are the lines from the song changed from the original ones in your signature or is it the other way round?
KKK Sahib ... you are being disrespectful to Shukla Sahib ... a poet of his talent need not steal from dime-a-dozen Bollywood crap. It must be other way around. I don't think so. I am sure.

Shuklaji?




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its okay tantu ji maharaaj

time aur chu... sabka CUT-taa hai

isme shy hone ki aur LLKC ban ke dikhane ki jaroorat nahi hai maharaaj ji.
Bhai Saheb, LLKC is not a degree or an award. You are born with it but don't know it. You bestow it upon yourself after several experiences and repeated feelings of self-loath and pity.

After few utterances of self-assurances ... utterances like "I must be fucking stupid" or "How could I be so fucking stupid" or "MOFO fucked me real good ... didn't she ('he' in your case)" ... those are the day when you find comfort in LLKCism.

LLKC ... you mingle with your own kind.
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बुरे फसें 'मजाल', आ कर जन्नत में ... हमने तो सोचा था, कुछ नया होता होगा!
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Re: “Naari”सच की तावीज - Bhramar-Hindi kavita (Hindi poem).

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KKK Sahib ... you are being disrespectful to Shukla Sahib ... a poet of his talent need not steal from dime-a-dozen Bollywood crap. It must be other way around. I don't think so. I am sure.
a great saint once gave me a very good advice. I will dispense it to you Badri sir, with blessings from the great yogi - read everything twice. it makes more sense

the first implication in my post is that Shuklaji's signature is original, otherway round means shuklaji is quoting the great Sahir.
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Re: “Naari”- Bhramar-Hindi kavita (Hindi poem).

छवि ‘माँ’ की धूमिल करते जो -‘पाप’ कर रहे सौ-सौ

ओ ‘माटी’ के 'लाल' हमारे
'शक्ति' रूपिणी 'नारी'
आओ ‘हाथ’ बढाओ अपना
‘चीख’ सुनो हे भाई
‘माँ’ ने तुम्हे पुकारा है अब
‘रखवाले’ सब आओ
छवि ‘माँ’ की धूमिल करते जो
‘पाप’ कर रहे सौ-सौ
कोई नोच -खसोट रहा है
‘महल’ बनाये नौ -सौ
कहीं एक ‘भूखा’ मरता है
‘बिन व्याही’- ‘बेटी’ बैठी
फटी -धरा है
बीज -नहीं है
मरा ‘कृषक’ ले ‘कर्ज’ कहीं है
‘विधवा’ घर ‘रोती’ बैठी
भरा हुआ धन देश हमारे
‘सोने की चिड़िया’ हम अब भी
आओ करें ‘शिकार’ उसी का
जो ‘चिड़िया की घात’ में बैठा
बीच हमारे
‘जाल’ बिछाए
‘दाना डाले’
‘फंसा’ रहा है
‘कैद’ में कर के
‘गला दबा’ के
‘डरा’ रहा है
'उड़ा' जा रहा -उस 'सागर के पार' !!
आओ उसको हम दिखला दें
‘ताकत’ अपनी –‘माँ’ की भक्ति
बड़े हमारे ‘लम्बे हाथ’ !
हम ‘शक्ति’ हैं !
‘काली’ भी हम !
गला काटकर
मुंड-माल ले -पहने चाहें !!
‘भैरव’ भी हम
‘रौद्र रूप’ हम धारण करके
‘तांडव’ भी करना जानें
अगर तीसरा- नेत्र
हमारा-शिव हो -शिव हो
‘शिव’ की खातिर
खुला तो कांपेगी -धरती फिर
काँप उठे सारा संसार !!

अगर ‘प्रलय’ ना अब भी चाहो
तो ‘धारा’ के साथ बढ़ो
चूम गगन -फहरा दो ‘झंडा’
आज ‘तिरंगा’
दूषित ‘मन’ का दहन करो !!!

सुरेन्द्र कुमार शुक्ल भरमार ५
८.४.२०११

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आंगन सूना बिन तुलसी के
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भोर हुआ, थी रंग -बिरंगी आसमान में छाई बदली
इंद्रधनुष था गगन-धरा मंडप पर शोभित
पुष्प-अधर कलियाँ मुस्कातीं - जैसे गातीं
मन-भावन हे अनुपम छटा से दिल था मोहित !
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स्वर्ण झील ज्यों भारत माता उसमे अंकित
स्वर्ण रश्मि बरसाते सूरज कण-कण झंकृत
जय-जय-जय उद्घोष सा कलरव- थे सातों सुर
नाना वर्ण की चिड़ियाँ पूरब- स्वर्ग जमीं पर
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ऊंचे-ऊंचे पर्वत वन थे - शांत झील को घेरे
प्रहरी वन जी जान निछावर करते जैसे वर्फ-गोद में सोये
माँ से शीतलता पाने को -योग ध्यान में खोये
पाते और लुटाते पल -पल पाप हरे ज्यों तेरे -मेरे
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पर्यावरण को शुद्ध रखे हम आओ पौधे और लगाएं
स्वच्छ वायु में सांस भी ले लें जीवन-जल भी पाएं
कंक्रीट का जंगल विन जल पशु -पक्षी ना आएं
आंगन सूना -विन तुलसी के -दीपक कल फिर कौन जलाए ?
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सुरेन्द्र कुमार शुक्ल भ्रमर ५
कुल्लू हिमाचल भारत
६ अप्रैल २०१६
८.३० पूर्वाह्न -९ पूर्वाह्न
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